In many parts of the world, there is
continuous coverage of sport on television.
Some people believe this discourages the
young from taking part in any sports
themselves.
To what extent do you agree or disagree
with that statement?
Television has become the state of the art entertainment tool and people may subscribe to their preferred channels at a low cost. However, some critics warn that teens would not engage in sports once they start watching sports channels fervently. I personally think that it discourages sports-lovers to play games as the intrinsic issue is whether the youths love sports deeply.
Firstly, television may alter teenagers' interests because of the widespread coverage of sports programs. For example, many youths in my country prefer watching sporting competitions to taking sports in real life. This leads them to spend more time in front of a TV set than taking part in outdoor activities.
In contrast, youths who are fans of sports may not be influenced by television adversely. For example, a person who favors watching the Liverpool soccer team will be inspired by the team which appears on television and may wish to experience how they play soccer during a competition. In other words, teenagers may start to get involved in sports due to their admiration for the sports team. Consequently, television may be a useful tool to arouse the interest of teens having sports.
It is a basic human nature that they try to mimic something that they enjoy. According to this nature, someone who finds some sort of game interesting on TV would like to play it as well. The broadcast of sports on TV makes these games more popular in many countries and it is natural that people of these areas would spend more time playing these games. People mostly watch interesting and live sports rather than watching all the sports all the time. Sports channel not only broadcast games, they also show programs that make critical analysis and shows the history of the games and these two aspects help the interested youths learn more about the games. While there are plenty of programs that could have negative impacts on the young generation, with the popularity of sports channels, young people watch sports more than those short of negative programs.
To conclude, the fundamental issue is whether the young treat themselves as spectators or athletes. In the case of the teens imagine themselves as spectators, television may dishearten them from taking part in sports but reversely, it may encourage the youth to start engaging in sports too.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, if, look, may, so, thus, well, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10948905109 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80395548076 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616788321168 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8133914209 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.666666667 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220810176314 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802242725754 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689552728522 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128853598375 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761773754671 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.