Many people are now spending more and more time travelling to work or school Some people believe that this is a negative development while others think there are some benefits Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Many people are now spending more and more time travelling to work or school . Some people believe that this is a negative development while others think there are some benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today, many people believe that spend more time to work or study will give more benifits while some believes that opinion will bring harmful consequent. In my opinion, the last two believes are all correct and this essay will discuss two thessis statements and give my opinion.
On the one hand, some believes that spend more time to work or go to school. Workers, students or other jobs have quite free time( if they just do not work or study over time), to instead of play games or lounge, they can learn more advanced knowledge or work more to earn money. For example, an officer works average works 8 hours per day and he earns $20 per hours, over that time, he works more 3 hours in the night and earns more $60 than his colleagues work overtime. At this point, study or work overtime can give some benifits.
On the other hand, some people say that study or work overtime can brings some negative trouble. To spend time to work or study, people must reduce their rest time and they can not have too much time to travel, play with their friends, ect. For instance: a girl student learn overtime and she use her free time to study a extra course, she can not meet her friends and her relationship has been abate day by day. This statement also give other thought.
In conclusion, I think that spend time to learn or work more can brings advantages and it also gives negative sequel and I think people should balance the suitable time.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...ple say that study or work overtime can brings some negative trouble. To spend time to...
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Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...: a girl student learn overtime and she use her free time to study a extra course, ...
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Line 3, column 320, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...time and she use her free time to study a extra course, she can not meet her frie...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'abated'.
Suggestion: abated
...r friends and her relationship has been abate day by day. This statement also give ot...
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Line 4, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...so give other thought. In conclusion, I think that spend time to learn or work m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1175.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46768060837 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.09354869002 2.80592935109 75% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524714828897 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 363.6 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.644685629 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.818181818 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9090909091 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4508510612 0.244688304435 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198202033535 0.084324248473 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110356246672 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289290789866 0.151304729494 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489749812933 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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