Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is believed that the coverage of mass media celebrities affects negatively to children. In my opinion, I partially agree with this view since it also has a number of positive effects.
On the one hand, it goes without saying that taking an avid interest in well-known people provides certain benefits. Firstly, children may be inspired by stars’ strenuous path to success which means that they can learn how to follow their idol’s footsteps to overcome difficulties and climb the ladder of success. Secondly, famous people are sources of entertainment for the kids for the purpose of relaxation after school. For example, fans of Taylor Swift can tirelessly listen to their idol’s songs and repeat them without hesitation. As a result, she will get a huge earning from streaming platforms while her fans can get relaxed.
On the other hand, it is obvious that mass media coverage of stars has certain drawbacks. In the first place, celebrities frequently appear in general public with high-end clothes of luxury fashion brands to show off their status, hence, children may easily imitate their flashy styles in spite of the expensive price of those outfits, especially those in formative years. Another disadvantage is the children’s excess homage to celebrities. Once they are involved in scandals, the fans can mimic the actions or start losing belief in life due to their impressionable age. For instance, Lance Amstrong, an eight-time champion of Tour de France, was found to have used doping and he was banned for taking part in professional competing forever. Prior to the problem, he was a role model for his unending perseverance, however, because of his outrageous wrongdoing, his popularity dramatically decreases.
In conclusion, the media coverage of famous people has both negative and positive impacts. Even so, I firmly believe that the drawbacks outweigh the advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...place, celebrities frequently appear in general public with high-end clothes of luxury fashion...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, even so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in general, as a result, in my opinion, in spite of, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25328947368 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82634327819 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654605263158 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0389760887 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.466666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.8666666667 7.06120827912 211% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18819544427 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684110900397 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896572044437 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157021845369 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120431469506 0.056905535591 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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