Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As most students choose to pursue higher education after graduation, the world is increasingly in need of qualified workers like electricians and plumbers. Therefore, there should be encouragement for students to participate in more vocational activities. In my opinion, I hold the same idea as skills leanred through vocational training is much more practical and useful for students’ future career
On the one hand, a university is a popular option for most people because it broadens their horizons academically along with offering them a degree. Indeed, it is inevitable that going to college helps students open up their minds by giving them deeper insights into their careers as well as making them do a lot of vital researches in related to their majors. Also, after graduation, students will get a diploma, which is required in almost companies, consequently, it builds up students’ confidence as well as their competitiveness in the employment market
On the other hand, although vocational education does not provide an academic environment, it helps shape and hone the utmost skills in their students’ future job and gives them a clear picture of what they will have to do. In fact, there has been an increasing number of university graduates struggling in their workplace because what they studied is of great difference with what they have to do in reality. Meanwhile, learners who went through vocational training accumulate hands-on experience, thus, they do not find many difficulties when working. For example, a mechanic can manage to tackle even the biggest problem with the engine because he has met it when he was practicing in vocational training
To conclude, it is undoubtedly that going to college can elevate students’ chance of having a good job in the future. However, I still endorse the view that vocational training is even more important as it does not only provide students with necessary work-skills but also helps them visualize exactly what they do with their job
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23765432099 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94995052904 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558641975309 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.2975951904 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.5105460481 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 188.555555556 106.682146367 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0 20.7667163134 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.1111111111 7.06120827912 228% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247779274273 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113108328592 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514152259065 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143470759285 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469686473231 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 13.0946893788 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.1190380762 162% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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