Many people now undertake extreme activities; from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think is a good trend?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own Knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
People interest and passion are vary from each others. Some people enjoy the adventurous activities and want to live risk life everyday, while other argue that why to risk own because of passion or trend , living simple life is good for everyone. I partially agree, with the statement and the essay will examine the favour and against of the topic.
To begin with, many people interest and life goal is different from others, they always want a thrilling life every day. They are so focused and connected with their aim, that they risk their life as well. The risky game is becoming the fashion trend in youth nowadays. So, every young people want to take risk their life. For instance, in Nepal also young people are interested in adventurous game like bungee jump, white water rafting, mountain climbing. However, involvement of the youth are also in increasing trend in this type of risky game.
But, sometime it is not only game, it can be thing of pride, nation, from which they can be recognize to all over the world. For example, late pasang lamu sherpe, the first women to climb Mount Everest , who is now recognize all over the world. Moreover, this type od risky activities can be backbone of the country’s economy. Like in Nepal, the certain percentage of national economy was collected by mountaineering, rafting, paragliding. However, it can also be the major attraction for the grown of tourism. Alternatively, not only passion, it can be pride as well.
Secondly, some citizen claim that, risking own life only for the passion is not good for the family, career and society. For example, many talented people had lost their life only because of the passion. So, living simple life with family is better than doing such risky stuff. People can contribute to nation from doing non- risky thing too.
Overall, doing dangerous activities for passion and interest is not bad, but they have to think about their family as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'varied'.
Suggestion: varied
People interest and passion are vary from each others. Some people enjoy the...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...s activities and want to live risk life everyday, while other argue that why to risk own...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... to risk own because of passion or trend , living simple life is good for everyone...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f the youth are also in increasing trend in this type of risky game. But, some...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
..., the first women to climb Mount Everest , who is now recognize all over the world...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'recognized'.
Suggestion: recognized
...men to climb Mount Everest , who is now recognize all over the world. Moreover, this type...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9003021148 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39561729529 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528700906344 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8682742401 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.55 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240057261306 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751836317007 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054186610805 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147829140044 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542603599309 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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