Many people say that family is the most powerful influence on a child’s development. However, some people suppose that other factors (such as music, friends,…) have a great influence on children.” Discuss both views and give your opinions.
It would be argued that family is a key factor influencing on their offspring. However, individuals think that children are being affected more by other categories such as genres of music and friendships. In my opinion, I agree with the first statement.
On the one hand, it is obvious that environment surrounding children has great impact on them. The amount of time children spending on studying, relationships, on schools is as much as at home. In that time, they communicate with people, share with everyone not only tips for studying but also daily stories, breaking news as well as their experience. They provide each other deep companionship and gradually being true friends who can change the children’s thought about problems, practical topics. For example, some researchers claim that if a person’s best friend does not enjoy crowds and always tries to avoid presenting in front of people, they will be swayed by the other then it could become one of their habits.
On the other hand, it is certainly true that family plays an important role in a lifelong. The offsprings are brought up by their parents in formative years that can shape a child’s personalities. As a result, the pattern of behavior of children tend to be the same as their parents, especially in lifestyle and traditional customs. Meanwhile, friendship can only covert childen’s mind instead of their characteristics. For instance, close friends could get children wore fashionable clothes that are on trend but they are unable to change the young’s favorite colour or fabrics which have been taken shape so far.
In conclusion, although I accept that environment around youngsters like friends or music style has an impact on their lives. Nevertheless, it could not be compared to the effect which family make on them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: than
...eople, they will be swayed by the other then it could become one of their habits. O...
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... that family plays an important role in a lifelong. The offsprings are brought up by their...
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Suggestion:
... the effect which family make on them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16498316498 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00945691706 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606060606061 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8705424719 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.266666667 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7333333333 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171454445904 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558143690765 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391016906671 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102791324353 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045311236649 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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