Modern technology has increased our material wealth but not our happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement
We, people of the world should be extremely grateful to all the master minds behind the development of modern technology as it made our lives easier, faster and convinient. Although it is a boon to a society in various ways yet it holds some disturbing consequences. Both the benefits and negatives will be discussed below before giving the final verdict.
Without a doubt, modern technology lit our lives through its immense contribution in various sectors. For instance, constructing dams would take ages where as now it takes couple of years for completion and be fully functional thus making irrigation department to fly in colors. Also, during olden days, there's a difficulty in carrying patient on rocky road to a hospital which was minimally equipped. Now a days, first aid is carried out in the ambulance itself on the way to the vastly equipped medical care centre on time. Education confined to 2D diagrams in text book streched its wings to 360° zoom, practical knowledge which enlarge the thought territory of a student also inturn is beneficial for a teacher to make their job effortless and efficient. The above points are just few picked from ocean of benefits that modern technology offers. It made its way into every area and magically touched them to bloom.
However, it also made public more lazier than before and simply losing their confidence followed by the deterioration of their joy. Furthermore, as everything is in faster mode from transport facilities to food we eat, people couldn't enjoy things in slow pace like walking in park and enjoying watching birds, talking to an old friend face to face etc. Such details and memory making were often missed. It is bold to say that we are turning more like a bio robot losing human touch and joy of sharing emotions. Raising health concerns like obesity and diabetes are major concerns that are increasing exponentially says the Japanese report. Also many criminals arises from this platform to modern thefts on vulnerable people. Not knowing how it is done nor what has to be done, people often fall for it and lose their fortunes thereby losing mental health.
To conclude, i will not agree on point that modern technology won't increase happiness. We can send messages instantly which would take days to months in previous times. We can make videocalls and talk to our beloved ones who reside in other side of the world. Things like walking in park, enjoying nature, slowing down the pace of life can be done on weekends or on holiday trips. We can make use of technology to fullest and still can be happy
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, thus, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 440.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88409090909 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56017557346 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 176.041082164 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618181818182 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5288722237 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6818181818 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127728928255 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374802297051 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556905145767 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761743186248 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279310213578 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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