In the modern world, many children spend a lot of time in front of computers, televisions and smartphones. This is very harmful to them. To what extent do you agree?
In the contemporary era, technology such as computers, mobile phones and televisions are being used for an excessive amount of time by juveniles, which is deleterious for them. I, however, partly agree with this and explain why.
To begin with, there are some reasons why these electronic gadgets are harmful. Firstly, children may become obese. Offspring, who are spend more time in front of computers, televisions and mobile phones and sit at one place for longer hours. As a result, they do not move their body and do lack of exercise. To quote an instance, one survey has been done by WHO claims that 40% of child population suffers from fat body. What is more, by using these technologies for longer hours can affect on child’s eyes, which may cause vision issues. Thus, electronic gadgets are harmful because of these negatives development.
However, computers, televisions and smart phones also have advantages to children. The primary one is that electronic gadgets aid children in study. Children can explore about any topic related to their academic on computers. Smart phones and Computers are assisting them to prepare assignments, which saves their lots of valuable time. Moreover, televisions also give information about world and their own nation, which expand their knowledge about history and social affairs in depth. Ergo, it is beneficial for children.
In conclusion, it is true that children are more tend to use electronic gadgets, which is noxious to them. While there are some negatives influences on children, it has several positive sides like helping in their academics. I believe that children should use these technologies for less amount of time and their own benefits such as for study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Suggestion: spent
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...these technologies for longer hours can affect on child's eyes, which may cause visi...
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Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'negatives'' or 'negative's'?
Suggestion: negatives'; negative's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...expand their knowledge about history and social affairs in depth. Ergo, it is ben...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, may, moreover, so, thus, while, as for, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20788530466 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69369087016 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587813620072 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2172882302 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7222222222 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215234559423 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660315454315 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404893481062 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128918690111 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264004216663 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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