More and more parents are allowing their children to play on computers and tablets as they think that children should learn technology skills Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

Nowadays, we live in a decade that has technology as an operating core for a prosperous life. Thus, understanding its method of working at a young age by interacting with electronic gadgets, such as tablets and computers, is considered by many parents to improve their children's technology skills. But it remains yet unknown if the benefits of those devices overbalance the possible negative outcome.

On one hand, computers and tablets are immensely beneficial as they facilitate access to different sources of information. Thus, by learning how to cope with state-of-the-art technology, one can ease its forward knowledge approach. For instance, once a child undertook the base of technology, he could find it easier to obtain information about different topics such as mathematics, environment or even games. That is due to the wide range and diversity of data possessed by the Internet.

On the other hand, anything we use for an extended period can develop an obsession or a habit, especially when games and computers are involved. Therefore, our children might not want to unhand their electronic goods a few hours before sleeping due to their addiction. As these devices produce blue light, using them right before sleep puts our eyesight, hence our health, at risk. Thus, if we continue to utilise them in an obsessive manner, we could develop serious diseases over time that could not allow us to show the possible knowledge we undertook handling those electronics.

In conclusion, I believe that unless monitoring the time spent on devices, parents ought not to allow their children to play on computers and tablets as some of their negative aspects could represent a threat to children's well-being.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an obsessive manner" with adverb for "obsessive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22826086957 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94857868423 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615942028986 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8733137214 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.25 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192978480478 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613606449785 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738807413377 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126606706249 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775704318625 0.056905535591 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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