Most people believe money is a very important consideration when choosing a job as it can help you get a better lifestyle however there are some who believe it is more important to have a job you enjoy and that this and not money will lead to greater happiness and a more balanced personal life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sometimes, for me, it seem so awkward that a lifeless thing called money is not only ruling the materialistic world but also physical and emotional being of a person. As it occupied every area that is connected to a human being, sometimes it is hard to choose between it's vast benefits or to go with what heart says. I discuss both the arguments before giving final verdict.
Money is the only thing that never satisfy people because the more we get the more we want it to maintain the status and its comfort. In such cases, we only left with an option to choose the source that offers a great deal of income. Moreover, every person wants his or her family to get a better lifestyle. For instance, best medical care, quality education, usage of branded products and also to make best match for their children etc., Here, some feel the future is well ensured when the basic needs are well mer along with the luxurious entertainment to go with it.
In contrast, fewer crowd opine that a definition of life is not working machine that put all the time, strength and effort to meet the target and stressing themselves. They believe life has to be simple yet joyful and productive. Recent Korean research studies reveals that people who enjoy their jobs are usually passion driven. Passion on anything fuels the person to achieve a greater heights in their professional career. Furthermore, people could also be able to balance their time distributing to other family and social responsibilities thus balancing personal life as well. Eventually, such lifestyle leads to greater happiness and satisfaction.
In my opinion, i believe money is important but it is not all. Balancing everything in life and enjoying whatever we do is something what money can't buy. So, one should be content and lead a simpler lifestyle to enjoy the fruit of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
Sometimes, for me, it seem so awkward that a lifeless thing called...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the best'.
Suggestion: , the best
... to get a better lifestyle. For instance, best medical care, quality education, usage ...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'make the best'.
Suggestion: make the best
..., usage of branded products and also to make best match for their children etc., Here, so...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ness and satisfaction. In my opinion, i believe money is important but it is no...
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Line 7, column 145, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... whatever we do is something what money cant buy. So, one should be content and lead...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, as to, for instance, in contrast, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82018927445 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60444819387 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0866037716 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8125 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188815870175 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615357481752 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592863569671 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106914681616 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553839032157 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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