Music play an important role in society, others think that it’s just a form of entertainment. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion.
It is irrefutable that music is the soul of the universe, taking control of many fields in humans being. However, there has been a constant debate about whether the functions of music are associated with humans’ entertainment or other more crucial roles. Personally, I take sides in the latter choice.
On the one hand, many individuals find it irresistible to listening to music especially when they want to relax or express their emotions. Firstly, by dint of enjoying music, people might have chances to explore their inner self and show off their emotional patterns, which is seized on as a catalyst facilitating their working productivity. Moreover, music represents different feelings and barges into humans’ souls with no boundaries or limitations, making it one of the most powerful ways for people to entertain. Commonly, a party or a wedding is often begun with pleasurable music to activate guests’ pleasure system and trigger their happy hormones. Hence, the mixture of distinct emotions would boost the excitement of those events.
On the other hand, I feel that music is made use of daily on account of other reasons, in terms of curbing possibilities of depression and raising academic performances. Firstly, after a hectic day at the workplace, people will be in need of an emotional boost to release all their negative energy. Therefore, listening to their favorite tunes is regarded as an effective therapy to meet those demands. In addition, lowering the levels of stress means enhancing your chances of overall well-being. For example, today psychologists take advantage of music to relieve the symptoms and decrease the degree of some popular mental illnesses such as depression or autism to an extent. Secondly, compared with those who use medicines to strengthen memory, those who immerse themselves in music are likely to see increases in their IQ and ability to memorize things more naturally and quickly. As a result, they could catch on to lessons better, so that their standardized educational results might get higher, which leads to a higher level of self-esteem and self-confidence.
In conclusion, although music is well-known as just a kind of manner to entertain, I believe that music is around us for more important reasons, including health problems and educational aspects. Additionally, music serves as an indiscernible part of humans’ life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28083989501 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97552377028 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606299212598 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7896921028 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.352941176 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0588235294 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158546152281 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506181011226 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03725784257 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108635347786 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409890142988 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.