New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time.
Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
The way youngsters’ leisure time is spent has been modernly determined by advances in technology. In my opinion, the negatives totally outweigh the positives.
Advocates of technological breakthroughs claim that some benefits can be yielded in the free time of the youth. One major upside is that they could gain more knowledge without going outside for interaction. To be more specific, all the children need to do is to sit in their private room and operate electronic devices connected to the Internet in order to absorb new information. Smart phones can enable them to exchange opinions on uploaded posts in discussion forums. Interactive TV might help them to receive quick responses for any queries they have on a particular show.
However, the downsides of the hi-tech devices are far more than the upsides, which can be obviously seen in the youth today. Firstly, social relationships are gradually deteriorated. Prior to the advent of social media, children used to directly socialize with their school fellows after class, whereas at present, they have a preference for visual contact in front of the screen. Genuine camaraderie is not valued as it was before, and is on the verge of being shattered. Because it is not easy to detect profile users, there is a number of cases with criminal intentions amid the online world, where people get involved in regular contact without perceiving the true identity of one another. Finally, physical degradation is also cause by the chronic dependence on technological gadgets. The quantity of modern day’s primary school students who are overweight is rising, threatening the future success of these young citizens. Besides, the children nowadays tend to contract many other severe health problems, including heart attacks. This is because of an inactive lifestyle with excessive devotion to electronic devices rather than physical activities.
In summary, the way youngsters dedicate to their spare time has been altered since the invention of novel technologies. This tendency certainly exerts more negatives points than the positive ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'caused'.
Suggestion: caused
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, firstly, however, if, so, whereas, in summary, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35649546828 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84268358026 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655589123867 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.353013798 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3888888889 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16340014252 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406332073212 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416433221244 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980024765087 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022327723754 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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