Nowadays children are consuming too many sugar based drinks what are reasons and solutions for this situation

The usage of soft drinks, which contains a lot of sugar, is high in children nowadays. t=This essay will examine the causes for this bad behaviour and also suggest some solutions to overcome this suicidal habit.

To begin with, the first and most important cause for this trend is easy availability of these drinks. Children like to have sweet foods and drinks always, nobody can blame them because they are not aware of its after effects. However,several kind of soft drinks are easily available in front of their schools. There are no restrictions for children to buy these drinks. Another important point is, soft drink companies made their product attractive with colourful pictures and advertisements of movie stars. children always try to imitate their favourite stars by drinking this highly sugar contained drink. Finally, the low cost of these drinks make them affordable to get it easily.For example, a pEPSI bottle only cost 10 rupees in India, a child can easily afford this cost by his/her pocket money.

Fortunately , there are some practical solution for these problems. Availability of these drinks to children can be reduced by strict law of ban for children on the drinks bottle .And stores must be banned from selling these products.Secondly,Government must impose heavy tax on soft drinks,thus the cost of this drink will be inflated and children cannot afford this amount. Finally, movie stars must be banned from doing advertisements for these companies.

To conclude ,ALTHOUGH THE PROBLEMS BY SOFT DRINKS ON CHILDREN ARE DANGEROUS, WE CAN TACKLE THESE PROBLEMS EFFECTIVELY WITH THE ABOVE MENTIONED WAYS

Votes
Average: 8.2 (10 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23664122137 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95678659985 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591603053435 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.601477412 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.538461538 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201283266349 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878204697453 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061755075427 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137397380098 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731427846338 0.056905535591 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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