Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s creation.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
It is now within reach that marine animals can be migrated from a natural to an artificial environment, such as parks. While these places can serve as an attraction, I firmly uphold the concept that this modernization has more drawbacks than the benefits.
Nowadays, the recreational park serves as a family educational entertainment where they can see diverse animals. Although it is undeniably true that amusement parks can be family leisure, it poses a significant hazard to the ecological system. Firstly, habitat migration can cause an imbalance in the homeostatic relationship of the organisms considering each has a link and function in the ecosystem. For instance, most people don’t know the importance of whales in the aquatic ecosystem; it is merely distinguished as a major predator in the food chain, next to humans. Furthermore, the nutrients in sperm whale poop aid stimulate the growth of plankton, uprooting carbon from the atmosphere, to provide a cleaner and more robust breathing setting for all animals.
Secondly, instead of preserving the extinction of animals, amusement parks cause more mortality through abusive training, mistreating and neglect of the physiological and environmental necessities of these animals consequently leading to over fatigue, sickness and eventually death. For instance, in Sea World San Antonio, reports show that in the recent year – 2019, thirty – eight orcas and fifty-eight Belugas died, not to mention the number of Dolphins dying and being treated every month because of infection.
In conclusion, aquatic animals should stay in their natural habitat to maintain a dynamic state of equilibrium in the marine ecosystem and to avoid extinction, evidently, the disadvantages exceed the advantages.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60147601476 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14105599413 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649446494465 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9335432406 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.8 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136977369521 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483978939444 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0196430987321 0.0667982634062 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0746360383473 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238095177726 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.74 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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