Nowadays many business meetings and trainings are happening online and not in real offices. Do you think advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages in this matter ?
Internet has revolunized social, commercial, educational and business sectors. At present, the trend of conducting official meetings through video conferencing is gaining prevalence in the entire globe. As a result, real offices are longer of that importance. Here, I would like to assert that merits of this happening outweigh demerits.
There are multifarious pros of this phenomena. First and foremost, online meetings enable entrepreneurs to save their precious time. To demonstrate, earlier, most of business runners had to waste their time while travelling to other places and countries in orders to have official dealings with their counterparts. Nowadays, video conferencing has made it possible for officials to save their valuable time by avoiding travels as video connectivity is just one click away. Hence, the lifestyle of working people is nourished with comforts, relaxation and time saving opportunities. Worldwide connectivity through video conversations allows people to get educational, sports and technical jobs trainings from world class tutors or expertise. Taking a real life example into consideration, I am taking supreme guidance for my Ielts test from topmost trainer Eliza bathe known as Liz via online classes. Thus, the best opportunities to grow can be availed easily.
Taking some more benefits into consideration, the reduction in travels made by business class people is surely lucrative to curtail the problems of traffic congestion, air pollution and crowd especially in the metro cities. Consequently, official online interaction has a remarkable contribution in the environment preservation. A hefty sum of money can be saved under the presence of online conferencing. To illustrate, rental offices or establishing official buildings are not required these days due to availability of online services. Therefore, Entrepreneurs are able save their a great deal of finance. On the contrary, opposite wind is also there.
To commence with, face to face conversations are considered more effective as everyone involved in the meeting can express his personal feelings, emotions and ideas more openly and freely. On the other hand, it cannot be possible by online meetings. What is more, sometime, it is really difficult to understand or learn technical or educational skills from online trainings in the absence of practical working environment.
To recapitulate, undeniably, web connectivity in terms video conferencing has few drawbacks. However, benefits of this practice are weightier than negative outcomes.
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Essay evaluation report
real offices are longer of that importance.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
assert that merits of this happening outweigh demerits.
assert that the merits of this happening outweigh the demerits.
Sentence: There are multifarious pros of this phenomena.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and phenomena
However, benefits of this practice are weightier than negative outcomes.
However, the benefits of this practice are weightier than the negative outcomes.
Sentence: However, benefits of this practice are weightier than negative outcomes.
Error: weightier Suggestion: No alternate word ???
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flaws:
No. of Words: 381 //the content is relatively more because there are duplicated contents. look this paragraph:
Taking some more benefits into consideration, the reduction in travels made by business class people is surely lucrative to curtail the problems of traffic congestion, air pollution and crowd especially in the metro cities. Consequently, official online interaction has a remarkable contribution in the environment preservation. A hefty sum of money can be saved under the presence of online conferencing. To illustrate, rental offices or establishing official buildings are not required these days due to availability of online services. Therefore, Entrepreneurs are able save their a great deal of finance. On the contrary, opposite wind is also there.
read it more times, you will find out there are a lot of contents which can be removed. or we can remove this paragraph, the second paragraph for the benefits are enough.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 2111 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.541 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.056 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.756 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.249 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.46 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.024 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Message: Did you mean 'there'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, as a result, on the contrary, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72703412073 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1844615546 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616797900262 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6819654878 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8695652174 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5652173913 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147400493173 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411365964653 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406061473369 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844194920361 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471802276662 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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