Nowadays, there are a lot of teenagers who have part time of while still studying. Do you think this is a good idea?
In the past few decades, there has been an upsurge in the increasingly number of teenagers who have a part time job after school, which have become one of the most arguable for both students and their parents. From my perspective, I totally disagree that this trend can have more advantages than drawbacks.
At the outset, working part time while being an adolescent will not bring any long term benefits for the development of students. It is widely known that students are often taken on to do some manual wok which requires little or no education. These jobs are highly unlikely to teach them valuable skills leading for any of career advancement. Besides, a lot of companies which can equip youngsters with useful skills and experience tend to choose university students in preference to high school ones. As a result, these tedious jobs are incapable of making any contribution to their development heading for a professional career.
Furthermore, taking part in doing part time jobs is expected to exert a negative impact on teenagers in all aspects of their life. Initially, going through a really tough schedule everyday with a lot of tasks to finish will not only do harm to their health by causing fatigue and exhaustion but also lead to poor academic result owing to the lack of time management. Furthermore, deciding to work while studying may dispose them to embark on the mistaken path. In all likelihood, they will be deeply instilled some bad thoughts due to the dark aspects of working life, and associate with the wrong people. In addition to that, not possessing the capacity of finance management, they will squander money on the wrong purpose and their misdeeds.
Last but not least, not only working can have adverse influence on students themselves but also affects the development of the society. It is believed that this trend can increase the rate of unemployment among adults. On the grounds that there is no minimum wage for workers under 16 in many countries, it can easily be seen that students are always paid less. Therefore, employers are more inclined to hire youngsters to work part time, which is a factor making the unemployment rate get worse as well as the gap between social classes bigger.
To my view, I strongly believe that adolescents should not be encouraged to work while still studyin
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, well, while, in addition, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94430379747 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66659803362 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579746835443 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3513976724 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.882352941 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2352941176 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183464344488 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535882629947 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052688638507 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100913271667 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04354374411 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.