Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The modern time when the living standard of a huge number of people rises and their hobbies and interests get fulfilled on a frequent basis. Shopping centers are among the most chosen places for young adults to spare time. Despite the detrimental impact on particular individuals, I believe shopping habit brings many advantages to our mental health.
On the one hand, many state that a lot of members of the young generation are overwhelmed by the attractiveness and joy that can be found at recreational centers such as the malls. High school students, in particular, account for the highest proportion of shoppers who are blamed to cause conflicts or even commit crimes at shopping malls. Such people usually come from a privileged family where financial issue is barely a big matter to them. In fact, a shopping addicts can use millions of dollars to have a sense of satisfaction in terms of experiencing all the designer clothes from famous brands. Their shopping time could overlap their school hours; in other words, they are more likely to skip classes quite often. As a result, their academic performance will drop significantly.
On the other hand, it is an undeniable fact that going shopping is a way to enjoy our life as well as to efficiently release tension from work or study. In practice, young people with modern and active lifestyle, especially those who wish to contribute to their own countries, would wisely allocate their money to purchase specifically costly fashion items but can be used in an extended period. This not only do they have more benefits in the long run, but their appropriate spending helps to promote manufacture and commerce and mostly leads to national economic growth. Regarding the society level, this behavior creates more jobs for the workforce and even opens promising paths for international companies to consider investing in the domestic market.
To conclude, I am of the idea that spending time at shopping malls plays a vital role for the nation's income and young people's mental health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 18, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun state seems to be countable; consider using: 'many states'.
Suggestion: many states
... our mental health. On the one hand, many state that a lot of members of the young gene...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...opping malls plays a vital role for the nations income and young peoples mental health....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, so, well, as to, in fact, in particular, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05014749263 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71398293956 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622418879056 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8010926152 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.285714286 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256714823645 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778664060998 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492244576057 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161597524536 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142334672354 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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