Often, the most successful people--in business, athletics, entertainment, or any field--are those who have focused all of their attention on achieving a specific goal. Those who spread their energy in many directions may not be as successful. In your opinion, how much of success is the result of remaining focused? Explain your position with reasons and examples from your own experience, observations, or reading
Some people consider that individuals must make all their efforts in achieving a success in any areas as business, athletics, entertainment. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this idea because of some reasons. Firstly, it is a serious influence on the result. Another is that there are some better ways to get a success in long-term. And this will be discussed in the essay.
The first reason is that working long hours has a severe impact on the final result of work such as not meeting the deadlines of their tasks. When people spend much time on doing a job without the break, they have to face with mental and physical disorders. As a result, they could be extremely stressful and need to be rested more time. To illustrate that one of my colleagues is a point case. He has focused his all attention on the new project during constant three weeks, but not taking care of his health, so he must be in the hospital to recover, and this leaves the plan unable to be implemented as our estimation.
Secondly, to gain a success in a life, especially with long-term targets, people should take advantage of proper approaches instead of devoting their all attention in a short time. Firstly, people could separate a huge goal into minor tasks that it is much easier to fulfill, which also helps them have a proper action plan, and avoid the heavy workloads that demands us more energy. In addition, people should have a short break when they have to expose to computers during constant time. They should walk around or talk to others to feel at ease instead.
In conclusion, I believe that it is not crucial to put all resources in getting a success. Instead, more efficient solutions should be fulfilled.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74161073826 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52318870471 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577181208054 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8591880436 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199033587723 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603314024815 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665668859676 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123931508319 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218152553029 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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