Often, the most successful people--in business, athletics, entertainment, or any field--are those who have focused all of their attention on achieving a specific goal. Those who spread their energy in many directions may not be as successful. In your opinion, how much of success is the result of remaining focused? Explain your position with reasons and examples from your own experience, observations, or reading
It is currently said that people must make their all efforts in achieving a success such as in business, athletics, entertainment. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this idea. Firstly, it has a serious influence on the result. Another is that there are some better ways to get a success in long-term.
The first reason is that working long hours has a severe impact on the result of work such as not meeting the deadline of their task. When people spend much time on doing a task without the break, they have to face with mental and physical disorders. As a result, they could be extremely stressful and need resting much more time. To illustrate that one of my colleagues is a point case. He had focused his all attention on the new project during constant three weeks, but not taking care of his health, so he was in the hospital to recover, and this left the plan unable to implement as our estimation.
Secondly, to gain a success in a life, especially with long-term targets, people should take advantage of proper approaches instead of devoting their all attention in a short time. Firstly, people could separate a huge goal into minor tasks that it is much easier to complete, which also helps them have a suitable action plan, and avoid the heavy workloads that demand us more energy and attention. In addition, people should have a short break when they have to expose to computers during constant time. For instance, people should walk around or talk to others to feel at ease instead.
In conclusion, I believe that it is not really crucial to put all resources in getting a success.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6925795053 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52405673779 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604240282686 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7506872569 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8571428571 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18362417723 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560767756929 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063588711255 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108550282863 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426140084474 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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