One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?
Over the past years, due to the improvements of the medical system all around the world, teenagers and adults except to live more and in better conditions than the previous generation. However, as long as an individual is not able to look after themself and be independent when is old I certainly believe there are more disadvantages to every part.
To begin with, in my country if you walk into a hospital you would most likely see more elders instead of young population. In fact, this is causing a shortage of beds and those who come to the hospital severely injured might get themselves hospitalized at the hallway. Medical treatment is keeping the elderly alive, but at what costs to the others?
On top of this, one of the biggest medical problems these days is dementia. Even if old people are still in good shape, they may not be able to look after themselves. They might have to live with their children or be cared for in a foster home , which can be expensive. Elderly people do not like to be a burden, but their children can feel obliged to take care of them.
However, it must be made clear that not all of the old population is suffering of an illness. For instance, those who remained healthy can enjoy their retirement as long as they saved enough money. Studies done by British scientists revealed that wealthy grandparents tend to live their lives happier and to the fullest during their sixties and seventies. In addition, grandparents can also take care of their grandchildren which is a great benefit for working parents.
To sum up, I consider that the government should aim to keep the population as healthy as possible. No one in this world would be happy to live up to 100 years and relying on others in order to survive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hildren or be cared for in a foster home , which can be expensive. Elderly people ...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...However, it must be made clear that not all of the old population is suffering of an illne...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, for instance, in addition, in fact, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66237942122 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60022630887 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591639871383 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2974262343 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156244129238 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497500740362 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386275814605 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0795678757102 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321349395347 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.4159519038 79% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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