One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outwiegh the disadvantages?
Recent decades have observed noticeable medical advancements, enabling higher life expectancy among aging populations. Although the upsides could be pronounced, the downsides could justify these.
On the one hand, there are many advantages when it comes to this trend. First, since life expectancy is growing, the society with aging population could ensue. This could ensure social cohesion and security as elderly individuals are less inclined to commit crimes. Second, old citizens have a penchant for upholding the traditional values and insitutions of the country, which holds significance of cultural distiction maintenance especially in the modern world of globalization, accelerating cultural intermingling.
On the other hand, this pattern could be fraught with many pitfalls. First, the aging population could pose great economic pressure on governments. It is implied that higher disbersements would be poured onto social services for population sustanability such as pensions, healthcare insurance, social housing, which would consitute a leage chunk of national budget. In addititon, in order to avert overpopulation, official authorities are highly likely to undertake initiatives of birth controls, which could be the severe blow to workforce. For instance, due to the one-child policy, China’s economic sectors are facing many downturns including financial insecurities and corporate collapse all stemming from the lack of young workers in workforce.
In conclusion, despite some benefits of social stability and cultural maintenance, higher lifespan among citizens could be a real threat, causing greater issues of economic damages. However, official authorites should balance the population distribution by birth regulations with greater efficiency to address the problems.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0862745098 5.12529762239 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09316071586 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647058823529 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1561199384 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.384615385 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0724238066161 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0320535451129 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449509148267 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0490177593604 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395889887905 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.04 12.4159519038 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.14 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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