People are living longer Some people think that it causes big problems Others however think the aging population has many advantages for business government and society in general Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

People are living longer. Some people think that it causes big problems. Others, however, think the aging population has many advantages for business, government and society in general. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people are convinced that the aging population can create many onerous problems while others think these population can bring many assets for the business, government as well as society. This essay sheds light on both viewpoints and gives my own opinion.
There are several reasons why many hold the belief that older people could bring many drawbacks in life. Firstly, it strains on welfare state when budgets are stretched thin because the aging population drive up medical and pension payments. Secondly, the greying population leads to higher retirement age in the sense that they would be in the job market for a longer duration. If the world of work fails to create new jobs, the end results can be fewer occupations available to younger people.
On the contrary, others suggest that people live longer may offer the number of blessings to business, society as well as the government. From a business perspective, many companies capitalize on products and services with the sole objective to cater to their needs. More importantly, the aging population can be the economic powerhouse, which is no doubt a good thing for any government. For society, older people who have a wealth of skills and experiences. To be more specific, they are living museum of traditions and values, their skills and experiences could be implemented to survive values and traditions which always face the risk of being forgotten.
In conclusion, the increasing population of older people is always challenging to everyone but it still provides many useful benefits for business, government and society.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this population' or 'these populations'?
Suggestion: this population; these populations
...any onerous problems while others think these population can bring many assets for the business,...
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Line 2, column 31, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'many holds'.
Suggestion: many holds
...opinion. There are several reasons why many hold the belief that older people could brin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1340.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19379844961 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71501598894 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596899224806 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.569208006 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.666666667 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304096143158 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101235762023 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762007931661 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188887973606 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767663329379 0.056905535591 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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