People believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In several years, celebrities and their own impact play more role in the society. In fact, children are indeed, significant candidates who are easy to get influence by celebrity’ circumstances. Moreover, I believe that there are a number of disadvantages on these trends.
Firstly, it is said that celebrities have their own style somewhat it seems inappropriate the traditional society. For this reason, those are get involved easily like children, they would probably look up their own idol and attempt to follow the unsuitable tendency. Fashion, for instance, is obviously not difficult to pursue as a fan, but for some particularly young people who are still need being controlled financial savings by their parents would be more likely to waste money on this bias.
Secondly, some celebrities are seen as a negative example for the young people and against the ethic and basic norms/ standards /propriety of the right pattern/ society. Using drugs, alcohol, having bad behavior, for example, are considered as drawbacks of them.
Since online media is the crucial factor helps celebrities become famous by only a click mouse. Therefore, young people are enough curiosity to be more likely to give an unacceptable action trying to be well-known on the social media. As a result, they could probably commit a crime by doing so, in another case, they are able to harm their health by trying so hard.
By the way conclusion, there are several drawbacks effect on young people if parents do not play an important role to warn their children. I would once again affirm that children should be more awareness and responsible to choose and look up their own celebrities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in fact, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13454545455 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81404740719 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3789058361 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.615384615 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165452182311 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589290707863 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027659106096 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916472120794 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00888563586349 0.056905535591 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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