A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Some people think that values such as honor and kindness have become unimportant and the only important thing is the amount of money a person has. I strongly disagree with this statement and I will explain the reasons below.
There is no doubt that respect towards richer people has increased in the last few decades, so, the more income you have, the more respected you will be. However, this does not mean that a rich person is more valued. For example, someone who has a lot of money and does not share his wealth is going to be seen as a selfish person. People neither like nor respect them. By contrast, rich people who serve the society through their charitable acts receive a lot of adulation and admiration. Take, for instance, the case of Bill Gates. He is one of the most respected persons in the whole world but that is not because he is the richest man. Rather what made him so respectable is his philanthropic work.
There are also lots of celebrities like actors and sports persons who work for charitable institutions. They use their fame and influence to gather support for the causes they believe in. They also attract a lot of respect. For instance, in Spain, my country, there is an actor couple who quit their profession to volunteer for a charity helping poor children. These actors are well recognized because of their kind acts and not because of their money.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that money will certainly increase a person’s social standing; however, old values such as kindness and generosity are still very much cherished and in order to win the true love and admiration of their fellow citizens rich people have to show kindness and generosity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, still, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6768707483 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39157252455 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537414965986 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 294.0 20.2975951904 1448% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1375.0 106.682146367 1289% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 294.0 20.7667163134 1416% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 96.0 7.06120827912 1360% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132678691861 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132678691861 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0952346072193 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524537868089 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 147.6 13.0946893788 1127% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -218.47 50.2224549098 -435% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 116.8 11.3001002004 1034% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.34 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 20.85 8.58950901804 243% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 52.0 9.78957915832 531% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 119.6 10.1190380762 1182% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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