Poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to have access to
university education. Some people think universities should make it especially easy for them
to study. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Poor citizens’ post-secondary education accessibility has been highlighted as an emerging problem due to its significant ramifications on societies. Although the suggestion making poor students easier access to university education appears reasonable, I partially agree with it.
On the one hand, there are many advantages when it comes to easier university admissions. First, since in many developing nations, poor citizens especially students constitute a large chunk of the population, poor students with proper top-tier education would benefit the economic. Basically, workforce with certified expertise is prove to accelerate both industrial and agricultural productivities, culminating in rapid economic advancements. Second, increased tertiary education in students with low economic backgrounds is invariably associated with the reduction in crime commissions. Because poverty-stricken individuals are often lured into following the path of social evils such as drug trafficking or prositution to maintain basic living essentials, easier accessibility to post-secondary institutions could improve their employability, thereby minimizing the possibilities of commit crimes to make ends meet.
On the other hand, easier university education could be fraught with many pitfalls. First, many top-tier insitutions have a penchant for offering tuition-free access to many students with low-income backgrounds to improve their educational opportunities. This could cause budget deficit stemming from the insufficient income sources, making the collapse and bankruptcy inevitable products. In addition, if university education opportunities are easily given to poor students, they tend to undermine it. In fact, as many poor students usually endevour to cultivate their academic capacities for university scholarship acquisition, their physical exertion on academic performances will vanish when their goals are easily achieved, which could limit their academic attainments.
In conclusion, despite some benefits related to better economic development and lower crime rate, official authorities should only promote easier top-tier education access by financing pecuniary assistance for poor students with outstanding performances instead of making it especially easy to study for all individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'proved', 'proven'.
Suggestion: proved; proven
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ld limit their academic attainments. In conclusion, despite some benefits relat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.42628205128 5.12529762239 125% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.35152671845 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63141025641 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.60771543086 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.1988059656 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.230769231 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20497626741 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760266766435 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554517210613 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140569688907 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249035477105 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.9 13.0946893788 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 13.28 50.2224549098 26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 11.3001002004 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 20.31 12.4159519038 164% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.85 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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