At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
it is well-known fact that the fraction of young generation is more than senior citizens in some countries. This issue of whether it is beneficial or not is certainly a controversial one. Despite the arguments of some people that the negative effect is more than the positive one, I personally believe that the large proportion of young adults facilitate the country’s development.
one point which I consider to be absolutely vital is that junior citizens provide tremendous productivities compared with the old generation. people who between 18 to 50 is the major manpower to maintain a society’s operation, while people who are over 50 is preparing to retire or already enjoying their retirement. it is obvious that if the number of older people outweighs the number of junior citizens, the society’s productivities will be hardly to keep in the high level and thus it will damage a country’s competitiveness. Therefore, as the situation of more young adults can bring more productivities to society, it is clear that it is better to have more younger people than older people.
In Addition, on the financial aspect, as the older people is the welfare user but the young is the financial supporter, the society can be balanced by having more amount of young adults than older people. people who have retired can enjoy various benefits such as healthcare and subsidies. However, people who are working are required to pay tax. When the government’s expenses outweigh the income, the government to go into deficit which will force the policy marker to reduce the expenses by cutting the welfare and increase the income by rising the tax rate. As a result, there are no winner in the society if the situation is having more older than younger.
In summary, owing to the productivity and the financial benefits, the advantages of the situation that younger people is more than older people definitely outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in addition, in summary, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17868338558 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09207567626 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498432601881 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5185346736 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.076923077 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169271107784 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611825807925 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463221982326 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109931452391 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198337947615 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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