At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

As the world is developing indefatigably, the population in many countries is increasing considerably. Thus, they are likely to have a population with more young people than old people. Although this fact can create advantages and disadvantages, in my opinion, the benefits of having young population do overweigh the drawback ones.
To begin with, it is evident that having more younger people may result a drawback which is a lack of professionals. Older people might be more educated than young one because they have more time to study and do many researches during their careers. For example, to become a math specialist a person has to learn at least 10 years of university studies and 5 years of PHD. Therefore, this may not be possible for a young adult yet.
However, having more young population than old population creates lots of benefits. Firstly, young adult is the best generation for the working sources in the present era. As people, nowadays, are living in the Industrial 4.0, an era of modern technology, the young people with fast-learning abilities and critical thinking, fit well in this modern world. For example, some industrials such as artificial intelligence and informatics require numerous skills and knowledge to be able to work in those sections. In addition, young people, normally, has stronger stamina the older people. This is because they have less old age-associated illness leading them to work more and live healthy lives. Take heart attack, a common illness to the elderly. As people get older, their heart cannot beat as fast during physical activity as it did. This fatal illness is rarely seen in young adults as they are very active and exercises a lot.
In conclusion, with the arguments given above, I believe that the advantages of youthful population outweigh the disadvantages as the youth are suitable to the modern world and their stamina are more powerful.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 42, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...o begin with, it is evident that having more younger people may result a drawback which is a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, at least, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09872611465 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83382410341 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550955414013 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4338176575 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1764705882 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4705882353 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.17647058824 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255883213917 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803165439327 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409700069949 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157791211173 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273847604218 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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