At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adult, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adult, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, inhabitants of some countries mostly are young generation, compared with the number of eldest people. The are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation. I think it is advantage of this country, but it depends on situation and view too.

Firstly, if the major part of population are young adults it can create strong competition between them. Without rivalry people can not do any development. I think officials can take advantages of it. In order to improve economy, science, culture etc.

Secondly, young people use technology more than oldest population. Technological organisations can earn more money on it and if income of organization increase they will pay more taxes.

The other advantage of this situation that young people need work and they pay taxes for it. Government can use it for country improvement and can pay pension to old people.

There are some disadvantages of this situation too. If young much more than elderly generation it can increase a number of poorly educated employees. The other one is more young people can be unemployed. It means young generation will earn little money. Then people even do not want to marry their income is low. It can influence population of the country.

In some countries where major population are young, they can do medical or life insurance much cheaper than others. In this case insurance organisations can earn good money too. Because if people young mortality can be less too.

Finally, overall information, young people are more vigorous than old people and they change the world better.

Votes
Average: 2.5 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: of the eldest
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'than the oldest'.
Suggestion: than the oldest
...ondly, young people use technology more than oldest population. Technological organisations...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...me disadvantages of this situation too. If young much more than elderly generation...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1332.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18287937743 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80143212003 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517509727626 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8191863831 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.4285714286 106.682146367 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.2380952381 20.7667163134 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240562931291 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869578108441 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828869767003 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133752787365 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115408332183 0.056905535591 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 50.2224549098 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.88 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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