At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, it has become far more normal for the rise of young people in comparison with the old people. While most of the population of some countries is occupied by the young has some benefits, I would argue that it has more drawbacks.

The rise in youngsters can be seen as advantage for two main reasons. Firstly, the working force of countries will be abundant because their health is better and brimful of energy. For example, it can be seen that in any construction sites or companies, the number of young adults is always higher than the older generations. This is likely to benefit the economy of those countries. Secondly, due to the development of young population, the living standard of country will increase and will not out of date since the technology will improve which lead to the positive impact of life and education.

However, two factors given above can be considered from the opposite angle. First of all, it is the burden of employment problems as the more young adults, the more work they need, so the serious consequence is the training course is ineffective. Secondly, rather than the positive side of accelerating young people, they will face with a numerous daily problems such as environment or greater demand for housing. Japan, for example, is a country which old population is the dominant choice, but this is a top country in the world, and the lifestyle of them is also higher than others.

In conclusion, the increase in the young will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on some countries and on the economy.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
...e, they will face with a numerous daily problems such as environment or greater demand f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86567164179 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66869052368 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55223880597 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3648787304 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.666666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193361729767 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675932259954 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415559724744 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119957797165 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270393449951 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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