Present a written argument or case to an educated non-specialist audience on the following topic:
In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win a match or to break world records. These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous.
What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In the begining of sport competitions, winners were initially motivated to break and make new world records or to habe a golden trophy to take home. However, present champions are drivn by the promise of monetory prizes or a chance at fame.
Before all the media, only a handful of sport enthuists knew about the sport events and cheered on the competitors to win. For example, the Olympics were solely exclusive to the Europeans. But now its door is open to all and has become a global sports championship .
As a result, every news on sport is often in highlighted on TV, radio and many social networking sites. So, now the sportmens are more interested on getting their recognition via getting famous. According to the athletes, winning the first prize means nothing if nobody knows you name. Sponsorship from various brands a very chaming way to earn some extra money for them. To get such sponsorships (and to keep up with other players), they choose other method than attending the games.
Although such changes in the mentality of the player is not harmful, sometimes some unwanted accidents happens. As instances, world famous footballer, Messi, has been accused of Scoring less in natioal games as he is not payed by Argentinian government. Same accusition have passed to Bangladeshi cricket all-rounder, Shakib al-Hasan. Whether all these rumors are true or not, is yet to be proven.
On a serious note, these players have become popular after proving their worth to the viewer and thus became fan favourites. However, the new generation players want to be well-known to the people as soon as they debut. So they choose unlawfull ways to succeed. Abusing substances, bullying others, buying slots of news or making a scandal are some of the acts that have been performed by the newcomers to gain attention. Such action not only creates negative outlook on the new players but also take valuable time away from the most-promising one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, thus, well, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8379204893 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55416681284 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633027522936 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 327.0 20.2975951904 1611% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1582.0 106.682146367 1483% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 327.0 20.7667163134 1575% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 77.0 7.06120827912 1090% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131342254362 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131342254362 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701421954067 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327009685133 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 164.9 13.0946893788 1259% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -251.97 50.2224549098 -502% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 129.6 11.3001002004 1147% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.27 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 24.1 8.58950901804 281% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 9.78957915832 572% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 132.8 10.1190380762 1312% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 133.0 10.7795591182 1234% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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