There is a saying goes “Prevention is better than cure”. Many people argue that the government should spent a great portion of a country’s health budget on health education programs and preventative measures than on treatment. This is countered against the idea of some people that a large portion of health budget should be spent on medical treatment and facilities. To a certain extent, I agree that more resources should be spent on health education programs and preventative measures.
First and foremost, I could not agree more that prevention is definitely better than cure. Nowadays, there are many influenzas and fatal diseases occurred around the world. It is important that government spends more public money on health education programs and preventative measures. The health education programs can be included in the syllabus of the subjects of primary and secondary schools by teaching the students to pick up the habit of washing hands before eating. For instance, the steps of washing hands can be listed on a board and place the board around the schools.
In addition, if more money is spent on medical research, more vaccines can be invented to prevent the infection of fatal diseases. For instance, females are encouraged to get the HPV vaccines from hospitals to prevent fatal diseases. In Malaysia, the most popular disease is dengue fever which can take away one’s life. Thus, the government educates the public to remove the water of the flower pot so as to reduce the breeding place of mosquitoes. There are even advertisements being published through multimedia such as television and radio on ways to prevent dengue fever.
The counter-argument is that government should not divert the budget on treatment to health education programs and preventative measures. Many people believe that the money spent on medical treatment is important to the welfare of society. They argue that health education programs and preventative measures could not totally prevent the society from infected diseases. For instance, when a person infected H1N1, there was no prevention for other people.
In conclusion, I personally think that both treatment and health education and preventative measures are important to the social welfare. It is the government to make a balance between medical treatment and preventative measures due to the financial constraint. It is good to spend some money on health education and preventative measures so that the society could immune some, but not all fatal diseases.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...c to remove the water of the flower pot so as to reduce the breeding place of mosquitoes...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'as to', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.290249433107 0.268076937826 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.136054421769 0.116061578633 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102040816327 0.0759168565197 134% => OK
Adverbs: 0.031746031746 0.0366838410393 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.015873015873 0.0131127313244 121% => OK
Prepositions: 0.124716553288 0.155750635184 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0340136054422 0.0379272487307 90% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89294435786 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031746031746 0.0210936926555 151% => OK
Particles: 0.00453514739229 0.00175180941692 259% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0997732426304 0.0948980150116 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0249433106576 0.00437022459523 571% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00453514739229 0.00967000014798 47% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2543.0 1161.00487805 219% => OK
No of words: 401.0 196.9 204% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.34164588529 5.90752243213 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 3.73763899035 120% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.42144638404 0.337110787985 125% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.319201995012 0.247514529752 129% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241895261845 0.171178102325 141% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.172069825436 0.112407865282 153% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89294435786 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 106.607317073 163% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43391521197 0.546246751206 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.9637335769 49.3433353143 93% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 8.93414634146 235% => Less sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 19.0952380952 23.0094962315 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.0695467586 42.9750493124 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.095238095 135.714022679 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 23.0094962315 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52380952381 0.689975730869 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.84146341463 130% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.48048780488 68% => OK
Readability: 51.0154375965 47.7609492067 107% => OK
Elegance: 2.44444444444 2.94281807926 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352176869832 0.418131533498 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.14069426382 0.181151798455 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.115605703364 0.0850326197045 136% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.543839146281 0.706616315825 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.159886816033 0.157042692854 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154148310625 0.228904883108 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935560816728 0.108899403657 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.430021613751 0.367819155151 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0703766637871 0.0812612215331 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265518498215 0.316326947829 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115801659919 0.0921553760075 126% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70731707317 270% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.14146341463 438% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.08536585366 147% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 3.16585365854 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 0.956097560976 209% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.02926829268 132% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 7.1512195122 168% => OK
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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