Problem:
Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The curriculum today has change over the past decade and some people are insisting that schools should have a subject that will teach the student how to properly handle money in order to survive. I, for one strongly agree with the statement because this will surely make them realize the vital importance of spending money.
To start with, schools should include one of their subject in teaching their students how to become responsible with their finances. In this particular subject, teachers and professors should inculcate to students the significance of budgeting and saving money that can be use in times of emergency. If this will be taught, consequently, it will not just help them organize their finances, also they can think maturely since they already have ideas on how to properly spend money. For instance, writing down their overall expenses everyday in a planner, students can contemplate if money spent the entire day went to essential things.
Moreover, if schools include financial literacy subject to their syllabus, there will be an enormous change on how adolescents spends the hard earn money coming from their guardians. In this way, instead of asking allowance always, they can easily get it from their savings especially if a sudden project needs contribution of money. In addition, they will learn to separate important and nonsense things once they know how their parents work hard in order for them to have money everyday for school. For instance, students that are studying in a different place away from their home, they can learn to properly budget their allowance with the help of this kind of subject. Once this lessons are instilled to students way of thinking, they will think hundred times and weigh first if they will spend money over material things or save it and use it for a better cause.
In conclusion, financial literacy is important to each and everyone and this should be taught at an early age so that students will learn how to become responsible on how they spend money wisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 531, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ce, writing down their overall expenses everyday in a planner, students can contemplate ...
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Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...rk hard in order for them to have money everyday for school. For instance, students tha...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...money everyday for school. For instance, students that are studying in a differen...
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Line 3, column 680, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... the help of this kind of subject. Once this lessons are instilled to students way o...
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Line 3, column 752, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...udents way of thinking, they will think hundred times and weigh first if they will spen...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ble on how they spend money wisely.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, still, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00589970501 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48399301175 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501474926254 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 22.4206935664 49.4020404114 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 141.416666667 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228974879728 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10698934666 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659557589098 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167931804167 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377746800505 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.