With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
To what extent do you agree or disagree
It is no doubt that the innovation in technology especially communication devices offers chances for human to have a convenient life. Nonetheless, some individuals oppose this due to unwanted consequences to the society. From my point of view, the benefits would overshadow the drawbacks on account of some reasons as follow.
To commence with, the negative sides of technological devices development would be a contentious issue. Firstly, it is apparent that making use of smart phones or tablets with high frequency would be detrimental to citizens’ health. According to WHO, mobile radiation wave has some repercussions on neuronal electrical activity in particular brain’s alpha wave disruption, which deteriorates cognitive function, sleep, and various brain diseases including brain tumors are documented. Secondly, the personal information of mobile users would be unsecured when they upload it to their cellphones. That is justified by a recent survey by MIT university that approximately 55 percent of blackmails on the Internet is the outcome of using unauthorized apps.
On the other hand, the advantages of communication technology would be indisputable. Admittedly, without the invention of smartphones, inhabitants are incapable of transmitting information regardless of faraway distance. The applications of these interactive means can be witnessed in the economy such as holding meeting via Facetime or working from home with the use of cellphones, which means the waste time for traveling could be reduced and productivity in working with would enhance. Furthermore, nowadays such cutting-edge devices are multi-functional, in other words, individuals could also access to the Internet in lieu of relying on the computer to read newspapers or seek direction. As a result, the uses of smart devices would be beneficial to not only the citizens but also the economy.
With the aforementioned statements, I reaffirm that, the advantages of innovative communication devices would eclipse the negative impacts. Nonetheless, citizens should not abuse the use of smartphones to keep body healthy and evade information leaking.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... to citizens' health. According to WHO, mobile radiation wave has some repercu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, in particular, no doubt, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74375 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.38156768378 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603125 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1415955115 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.533333333 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0965770026611 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336770871187 0.084324248473 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0244732876071 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0579268207602 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114290353436 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.4 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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