Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?
It is true that in some regions, people often tell children that if they work hard enough, they will achieve their goals successfully. In my opinion, this argument has both positive and negative effects on children. This essay will provide suitable explanations with examples.
First of all, there are a lot of beneficial effects that giving messages to children can bring for them. The first advantage is that it sets up their goals already so they can focus on how to achieve effectively. For example, in Vietnam, parents often reward their kids when they have a good mark. As a result, it makes children feel excited and if they want to receive again, they must work harder next time to get another good mark. This creates massive motivation for kids, which increases their competitive spirit dramatically. Secondly, in some cases, when parents find out their kids are extremely talented in some subjects, they can advise them or even support them to develop their skills better and better. For instance, if children are good at playing physical activities, parents can let them join some physical clubs such as football clubs, swimming clubs, and so on. This gives their children a high chance to explore their skills by pushing their limits to the max. Therefore, these children might become popular athletes in the future.
On the other hand, there are still some drawbacks when making messages to children. The most negative effect is that it reduces their imagination since they must chasing these goals and this leads to many serious problems. Take asian people for an example, parents usually force them kids to work jobs with high salaries such as doctors, officers, lawmakers, and so on. It puts a heavily pressure on children and makes them feel depressed and stress. In addition, when we put a massage to children, it means we are guiding them so they can have lots of opportunities in the future. However, if we make wrong decisions, it can affect their's lives badly. For example, if kids have a passion for drawing but family pushes them to work other jobs. Therefore, these kids might waste their's talent and time to do things that they do not want to do.
In conclusion, despite some drawbacks, I believe that the advantages of giving good messages will outweigh. It can be more and more useful for kids in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 378, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('heavily') instead an adjective, or a noun ('pressure') instead of another adjective.
...officers, lawmakers, and so on. It puts a heavily pressure on children and makes them feel depress...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in some cases, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86466165414 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43665484345 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521303258145 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2318427401 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2272727273 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77272727273 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0396538008372 0.244688304435 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0142809472405 0.084324248473 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0221746534807 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0269440481098 0.151304729494 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00747533201477 0.056905535591 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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