Some cities create housing areas by providing taller building. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. Which solution is better?
Nowadays, many city planners tend to construct various taller buildings in order to contribute sufficient housing areas whereas other believe that the countryside is more suitable place for housing. In this essay, I will dicuss about two statements and give my own perspective.
On the one hand, the counstruction of housed in the rural areas have numerous advantages as it reduce the housing burden for young people. Because adult apparently have to buy a house before getting married in some Asian countries. This will lead to increase the price of houses and hurdle them to achieve their targets while the expenses of houses in the countryside is far more unexpensive than the city one. However, this statement can bring various disadvantages as citizens cannot receive adiquate services. Because the government tend to put a higher amount of investment money for public services in the city so when people have a medical condition, they frequently travel to the city.
On the other hand, building more sky-crapers in the city can bring many benefits. When adult come into a city, they constantly need a place for occupation, which leads to the increasingly need of the construction of houses withoust expanding the city areas. As a result, the city planners can construct enough houses for residentce while saving the land of the city. However, the construction of many taller buildings can cause several drawbacks because of the overcrowded. If a lot of people travel to a city for landing a jod or education, some public services, such as: transportation, medical service, education and so on, cannot efficient operation, which will directly affect the quality of public services people needs.
In conclusion, the construction of taller building in the rural areas can help people easily own a house but they cannot access the optimal public services. Furthermore, building houses in the city can tackle the housing problems and save land but this approach cause overcrowded in the city. In my opinion, I think that construct houses in the city is the most effective solution because it provides enough houses for residence as well as they can receive the modern public services.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 139, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ce the housing burden for young people. Because adult apparently have to buy a house be...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, whereas, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13725490196 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79068644936 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49299719888 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9936957396 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.266666667 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354787903055 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132436415983 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854104722482 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241913770099 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646019318183 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 139, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ce the housing burden for young people. Because adult apparently have to buy a house be...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, whereas, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13725490196 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79068644936 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49299719888 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9936957396 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.266666667 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354787903055 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132436415983 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854104722482 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241913770099 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646019318183 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.