In some countries the average worker is obliged to retire at the age of 50, while in others is obliged to retire until they are 65 or 70. Until what age do you think people should be encouraged to remain in paid employment?

In this sophisticated era, everyone is working. Thereby, in certain parts of world, 50 age is retirement age for every employees. However, in others people still earn money at the age of 70. To exemplify, many politicians in every country enjoying their power into their eighties. Some believe that there is very less arragement on a good retirement age. Although after the age of 60 or 70 a person become less active, I believe that it upto a person capability no age limit should be require for retirement.

To commence with my perspective I would like to say that people should do work until they want to do. Since it can be said that most of the people who are old aged they feed their whole family by doing work and earn money if authority legislate the strict requirement age, then definetely it would be abhorent by the people. Moreover, the fact is that these days, most of the old people are more intellectual and have more energy than adults because they have capability to solve any problem with so much of ease. Along with this, they also assist company by teaching work to the new employees. So, age is just a number, every one can do work at any age but its depend on their courage towards work.

Another optimistic attribute about this phenonen is most of the old people get monotonous if they feel free. They like to do pragmatic work. Take Bill Gates as a example, it can be said that he is the very world popular and successful person. He is owner of Microsoft. It cannot be denied that he is approximately 80 years old and still working. Even though he have a lot of money, which is considerably enough for him and his family, but rather than taking retirement, he loves to do work for his health. Apart from this, if government impliments the law of strict age for retirement, then it may be prove fatal for old people because if they sit alone at home rather than going work place, they they may be get, victim of many diseases because by doing work, a person surely get away from any health related diseases.

To recapitulate, after scrutinizing the statement, it is justified that although some people become inactive at the age of 60, but it not mean that 60 is appropriate age for everyone. Every person should do work at any age if he/she are capable of doing work.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 486, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'required'?
Suggestion: required
...erson capability no age limit should be require for retirement. To commence with my ...
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Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...o do pragmatic work. Take Bill Gates as a example, it can be said that he is the ...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...s old and still working. Even though he have a lot of money, which is considerably e...
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Line 5, column 693, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: they
...e at home rather than going work place, they they may be get, victim of many diseases bec...
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Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'means'?
Suggestion: means
...e inactive at the age of 60, but it not mean that 60 is appropriate age for everyone...
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Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...son should do work at any age if he/she are capable of doing work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 415.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54457831325 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51245005598 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513253012048 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0097638019 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265817665153 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898130863413 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676208032171 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184126896951 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562703426506 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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