In some countries the average worker is obliged to retire at the age of 50, while in others is obliged to retire until they are 65 or 70. Until what age do you think people should be encouraged to remain in paid employment?

There are some nations in the world in which retirement age is 50; however, some people have the ability to work till 65 or 70. To illustrate, politicians are enjoying power even in eighties. Therefore, a appropriate retirement age is still under discussion. I believe, there should not be a fixed age to retire a person because of some practical reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.

One of the main reasons of my point of view is that the maximum age has nothing to d with employment. if a person is healthy, experienced, skilled and has a desire to continue work after the age of 50, he or she should be encouraged to do job. In today's competitive scenario, every company or business wants to proliferate and for this if they have quality workers, they often go with them regardless of age. Amitabh Bachan, for example, is still doing movies in age of 78 because he is providing quality in his work and audience wants to see him on a big screen.

The second major cause of not limiting a person because he is more than 60 years is that there are chances when either merely a single person is bread winner or he has to pay his mortage. If in this condition, there is a rigid rule related to retirement, these kind of people would go under debt which further put pressure on nation's economy in order to empower them. Therefore, to make people independent and lower the burder on countires' budgets, there should not be a limit to work in a workplace on the basis of how old you are.

In conclusion, although 50 year is a age ckeck in some nations for paid jobs, some people are working in their late seventies. I believe, taking productive work and lowering the pressure on government, age should not be a parameter of retirement unless or untill a employee is working productively.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, still, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71203148818 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535384615385 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.5609484526 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288809233942 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104480705479 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763503909777 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180407777877 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878546098928 0.056905535591 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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