In some countries, the difference in the age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages outweigh the advantages?
For the past few decades, there has been a significant rise in the number of married couples who decide to have children later in their life. This leads to an increasing age gap between generations in a family, which can result in both positive and negative outcomes. In my perspective, I believe that the disadvantage will outweigh the advantage it may bring.
At the outset, both parents and children are highly exposed to a lot of health risks due to delayed parenthood. Initially, older parental age is scientifically proven to be associated with subtle impairment in cognitive development during both infancy and childhood. According to a research study, children with older parents have lower tests scores when given tests on cognitive abilities at the age of 8 months, 4 years,...In addition to that, the rate of birth defects, risk of premature birth and low infant birth weight is also seen to be much higher in advanced parental age. Furthermore, regarding parents’ side, having to raise a baby when entering middle age with the downgrade in their health is highly likely to cause fatigue, depression and stress.
Moreover, the widening age gap is the main reason contributing to the intense relationship between family members. This is due to the fact that parents are raised and grow up in completely different environments from their children, leading to different thinking, mindsets and lifestyles. Meanwhile, the newly born, dynamic generation are much more open minded, receptive to new ideas, therefore, pursue unique and unconventional ways of thinking and living. Besides, at an older age, parents tend to be less patient and motivated to meet the endlessly increasing demand of their children. As a consequence, in all likelihood, there will be miscommunication as well as conflicts between family members. This contributes to a weakened and unstable relation due to the lack of attachment subsides and emotional bonds.
Postponed parenthood also gives rises to many issues regarding children’s benefits and responsibilities. They have less time spending with their loved ones and may have to experience a fragile relationship with their parents. However, when they grow up, they have to bear a lot of responsibilities much earlier than their peers. Taking care of old parents at a young age, paying for health services when they still find it difficult to find job and build a career not only have detrimental effects on themselves but also their parents’ living.
To conclude, I strongly believe that couples can reap much more benefits when they choose to give birth earlier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, well, while, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 420.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22142857143 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98144203342 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2049912471 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.833333333 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178486964633 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053868072903 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035529259382 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0887153894616 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538383960101 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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