Some countries encourage teenagers to have a part time job to see it is a good thing, while others disagree.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is argued in nations whether it is appropriate for youngsters to take on complementary job opportunities. In my opinion, I believe that, additional working time will be more beneficial for teens, even though other people have their reservations.

On the one hand, there are various reasons to the disagreement of added working time for teenagers. Firstly, the school time table is virtually full in most instances, thereby potential stress is likely to be mounted on these students. In other words, attempting teenagers to involve in other form of work merging that with the curriculum will rather lead to attention deficit in their academic environment, which will later affect academic performance. The other point worth noting is that, the youngsters are likely to be exposed to quiet enormous danger when taken additional work. For instance, teens working in hard labor such as climbing heights can lead to falls, which I think is not worth it.

On the other hand, I would argue that, taking up other working opportunities by the youth is highly essential as they are able to save money for their adult life. More precisely, they are able to raise money form their part time job, which can be used exclusively to cater for a few budgets such as supporting tuition fees and other personal items needed. By so doing, they understand the value of money as conscious spending is employed, rather than unnecessarily misusing money for less relevant purposes. Another reason is that, skills like interpersonal relationship, communication are improved upon and also become significantly handy later in the workforce. Thus, encouraging teenagers involve in free time work.

In conclusion, inasmuch as there are varied reasons for youth to engage in complementary work, I think a lot more will benefited when they are given the chance to have additional work.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...precisely, they are able to raise money form their part time job, which can be used ...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...they are able to raise money form their part time job, which can be used exclusively to c...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...lementary work, I think a lot more will benefited when they are given the chance to have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, thus, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16171617162 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87040311113 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2914306911 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.307692308 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0769230769 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120783009186 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493762334822 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427677052651 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0764897855775 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325548465426 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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