Some countries encourage teenagers to have part time job and see it as a good thing, while other disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.

Essay topics:

Some countries encourage teenagers to have part time job and see it as a good thing, while other disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.

In the modern society, it is very common to see teenagers working everywhere in the city. Part time jobs are essential for them to provide their everyday needs. However, working in a young age is difficult but they disregard that to fulfill their dreams or goals in life and for their future. Teenagers also learn a lot of things through the jobs they do when still being students.

To start with, teenagers learn how to arrange their time in work and in school. They have to balance it for them to be able achieve their goals in life. Young individuals can develop their work experience and there is a chance to get hire fast in future regular jobs. Minor age, effectively manage their finances such as in food, clothes and house rental. They can develop their communication skills, know how to handle people, improve their interview skills and filling out job applications. This will result enhancing their self-confidence, sense of responsibility and independence at young age.

On the other hand, working in a young age is difficult because they have to balance their work to their study. There might be less time for home work. They cannot accomplish their task, assignment and other requirements needs in school that may submit in due date. They can get a lower grade because of absenteeism. They cannot attend their class because of tiredness from work. There is also an increased stress because of overload in work and in study.

In summary, I totally agree that working in young aged is important for their good future in life. There is a way on how to balance everything as long as they can do it.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: Part-time
...enagers working everywhere in the city. Part time jobs are essential for them to provide ...
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Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t a lower grade because of absenteeism. They cannot attend their class because of ti...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, in summary, such as, to start with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78214285714 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57245763139 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539285714286 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7881324988 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.3888888889 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5555555556 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.081846598 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339896901712 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384260411749 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0600417054246 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409275894475 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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