In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concert or play classical music. Why ? Should young people encouraged to attend and learn more ?
Nowadays, people, particularly the young in many nations are believed to hardy go to concerts of singers or music bands performing classical music as well as having no interest in learning how to play this kind of music. This essay will provide some elementary reasons and proposing some points of view whether to study deeper about this music.
On the one hand, the dramatically downward trend in enjoying the conventional music is attributed to a number of factors. Firstly, because of the fact that today, the young generation seems to have numerous chances to access wide range of music which are outstanding in the market such as Rap, EDM or Electronic Dance Music and so on. In the other words, these sorts are believed to cauchy and satisfy the demand of market as well as simple lyrics, which makes people, listeners do not have to try hard to vivid in their own mind. This is compounded by the fact that Rap or EDM sometimes can be a method to showcase the individual character of their own in analogy with the acient songs whose typical theme were about social phenominons at that time, dark sides of current society or other issues in general rather than showing personal traits. Finally, this trend is likey to be signigicantly affected by friends and peers surrounding teenagers or schoolchiren, so they have a tendency to prefer choosing to join other concerts than ones performed by classical artists. For instance, in Vietnam, there are an increase number of students and learners going to music concerts hold by celebrities from Korea such as Black Pink, Twice or Red Velvet since there are always dancing in each of their performance as well as colourful show with high- quality of sound and light system can boost the participant mood. This enables them to share the emotion much more easier than enjoying the traditional performance shows.
Neverthless, personally, I tend to concur with the statement that it finds vital to stimualte young generation, especially who are currently going to schools and universites, to have sufficient basic information about the music that used to be popular in hundreds of years ago. As, the market music is supposed to be meaningless . In the similar words, it concentrate on the performance and apprearance rather than lyrics. Most of works of Mozart, who has been one of the greatest composers, are as a typical example. They are considered providing a medium to convey the thoughts, emotions and feelings that hardy to say in words, which leads to generate a deeper connection and sympathy among humanity. Besides, they could also provide fundamental knowledge for someone being passionate at studying how to play the classical instruments professionally.
In conclusion, for the aforementioned reasons, the trend may be caused by various causes such as exposing new modern music and the impact from peers, and there should be encouragements to learn or enjoy this conventional music.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, may, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in general, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 41.998997996 186% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 488.0 315.596192385 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94262295082 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73323171908 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 176.041082164 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543032786885 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 506.74238477 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 488.0 20.2975951904 2404% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2412.0 106.682146367 2261% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 488.0 20.7667163134 2350% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 129.0 7.06120827912 1827% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255819837203 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.255819837203 0.084324248473 303% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174776408088 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917821011783 0.056905535591 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 245.8 13.0946893788 1877% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -423.84 50.2224549098 -844% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 193.6 11.3001002004 1713% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.85 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 32.18 8.58950901804 375% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 134.0 78.4519038076 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 9.78957915832 582% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 197.2 10.1190380762 1949% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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