In some countries, small town-centre shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores, and it may result in an increase in the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?
In many nations, the increasing preference for large out-of-town stores has troubled small-town-center shops’ business. Consequently, people who do not possess personal vehicles find it challenging to access out-of-town stores, while an escalation in the use of cars is also observed. Personally, I disagree with the idea that the drawbacks of this development overshadow its benefits
Regarding the positive aspects, the change brings about two major benefits, including improving goods’ production and enhancing economic activities. First, large out-of-town stores always generate a greater number of sales as they possess a wider range of products, which adds convenience to customers’ experience. Consequently, when these stores dominate the market, their sales grow even higher, which boosts the production of goods. Furthermore, the economy would be greatly benefited as people shop more, while the national production also escalates
Despite the mentioned benefits, this development also possesses a side of detrimental consequences related to the environment. When in-town stores die out, people without cars may encounter enormous obstacles when they shop for products, leading to the universal phenomenon that they must rely on shipping services. The increase in shipping activities directly surges the amount of carbon footprint for each purchased product. Besides, as people must use cars more for their shopping activities, the amount of greenhouse emissions would rocket even more steeply, greatly endangering the environment
To conclude, I believe that the shortcomings of this development are enormous compared to its benefits. As the environment has suffered enough, having more carbon emissions is unbearable and could cause irriversible consequences. Besides, the development of the economy created by the expansion of out-of-town businesses is only short-term as in-town businesses start to die out
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'accessing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: accessing
...s personal vehicles find it challenging to access out-of-town stores, while an escalation...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, furthermore, may, regarding, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.96762589928 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14693931601 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611510791367 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9086552409 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.818181818 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2727272727 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356714902107 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136087244462 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12078756783 0.0667982634062 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225166113755 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960089794771 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.64 12.4159519038 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.22 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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