In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies.
What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
Nowadays, the youth find themselves having very little time to rest because of the exhausting devotion they have to put into their studies. From my point of view, this excessive commitment to study has two main causes.
The first one is parental pressure. Parents are the ones with a significant impact on their growth since each one wants to see his or her child do well in school and succeed in their future career, and they are the ones who spend the most time with their children when little. Thus, they put pressure on their children to spend hours each day studying and forget about their need for leisure time to unwind from the outside world. One solution to this problem is for schools to hold monthly with parents. There, the tutors should inform parents about the risks and mental disorders a teenager is exposed to due to unbalanced lives with little amounts of leisure time.
Another reason for young learners' exhaustion refers to their academic profiles and competition for higher education places. Some domains have a greater demand than the maximum number of university places. Hence, only those students with very high grades manage to obtain a position and get the opportunity to develop and succeed on their desired career path. This means that those who want to have a chance of enrollment must dedicate their free time to study. An effective action that could be taken is the government investment in the creation of more university places either by building new campuses or expanding the existing ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'learners'' or 'learner's'?
Suggestion: learners'; learner's
...isure time. Another reason for young learners exhaustion refers to their academic pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, so, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1276.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92664092664 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33430814144 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637065637066 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5155091747 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.333333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 7.06120827912 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180948390404 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626567906418 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404742544217 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119996538429 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174904073266 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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