In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

It is seen that development and progress of youth is very dependent on the way they are grown up. In some cultures it is believed that children should be taught that they can attain whatever they want with their strong effort. Although it is very reasonable thought still it has some drawbacks. This essay will discuss both positive and negative impacts of this believe on youth,s personality with some examples .
There is an ample evidence that hard work is most important factor in every one,s life. That is why most of international fame people has strong stuggle in their life. For instance, some of celebraties like Ronaldo, micheal jordan and Coby Brian has worked hard to reach to their targets. Teaching youth that constant work hard can make them to achieve their goals is an important factor . This thought makes them more confident and hard working person in their life. Another significant change is that chilren are more focussed and goal oriented . This thought makes them successful and will impact progress of nation and country.
On the other hand there are some draw backs of this way of upbringing. Firstly, if someone is working hard but due to some un seen reason they cannot reach their target, it will cause anxiet and depression. A research in Toronto university in 2017 showed that 30 percent of suicidal attempts among youth were associated with some failures in their life. Secondly, if someone wants to achieve any un real target, they try fair or unfair means to get that task. This approach can promote more crime and social issues like bribery in the community. Therefore it is is important to teach growing children that work hard is important to reach a positive goal but luck has an important role too. There is always possibilty of failure which should be taken as positive way too.
In conclusion, there is no doubt about importance of hard work but it is nice to accept faiulre in life with positive reinforcement.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84730538922 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45832758444 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526946107784 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3917778478 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.2105263158 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5789473684 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215874626512 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655791372087 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596405736788 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130819891374 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796205888877 0.056905535591 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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