In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

Perseverance and diligence are, for a long time, considered as two of various decisive factors for one's prosperity in life. Therefore, in many cultures, children are universally encouraged that as long as they try their best, anything can be achieved. From my perspective, this message may have beneficial as well as adverse impacts on the growth of the child

On the one hand, there are a variety of benefits that the given message brings to youngsters. Among them, the fundamental advantage may lie in motivation deep inside these words. To be specific, it can be the guideline for youngsters to overcome all challenges and struggles they may encounter within their lifetime and that's all thanks to the spiritual and faith-based values of this brief sentence. By the way of illustration, there were several great characters, such as billionaires or national leaders, have all undergone a very dark period of their life, but they went through all the trauma with an everlasting belief in the brighter future.

Nevertheless, the severe influence of this message on children should not be underestimated. First and foremost, it may be misinterpreted from its original purpose, which resulted in children being under heavy the pressure to succeed at all cost. Hence, they cannot accept the reality that there are things in life that cannot be accomplished and, consequently, fall into depression and self-blaming for not trying hard enough whenever receiving an undesirable outcome. Furthermore, this misunderstanding may lead to excessive endeavour to gain the out-of-reached achievement. As a result, these miserable children often end up suffering from exhaustion both physically and psychologically

In conclusion, the message of trying hard so that they can gain anything they wished for maybe an ideal motivation for children to go through all challenges in their lifetime. Nonetheless, it may be misunderstood and lead to the consequences of self-blaming, depression and fatigue

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Average: 9.1 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40836012862 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23787666333 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594855305466 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.3494013202 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.166666667 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9166666667 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 7.06120827912 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255602601381 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907784835738 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874155433388 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169090055375 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491257784842 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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