In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In some countries, children are taught that hard work will help them achieve their goals. In my opinion,
this message can inspire and motivate them to overcome hardships, but at the same time, it can cause
delusion and disappointment.
On the one hand, teaching children that hard work can guarantee success has several advantages. To
start with, this message can motivate children, especially those who believe that innate talents
determine success. For example, when learning a second language, which is a challenging and timeconsuming process, children need to truly understand that hard work, and not talents, is conducive
to enhancing proficiency. That way, they could stay motivated and keep on learning when they
encounter setbacks. More importantly, the role of valuing hard work goes beyond being a mere
source of motivation. It can also help children to develop a positive mentality and improve their
resilience, all of which are necessary for their adult life.
On the other hand, the biggest disadvantage of the notion that diligence ensures success is that it
may mislead children into spending too much time and effort on the tasks in which hard work plays
little role. For example, a child wanting to be a professional singer may waste time on voice training
without considering their lack of musical talents but still hope that they may achieve success one day.
Similarly, most painters need to have a great and unique sense of aesthetics, which is considered as
a rare talent and therefore cannot be acquired through hard work. Believing that hard work alone is
enough can breed frustration, delusion, or even mental illness.
In conclusion, teaching children that hard work will always result in success is a great way to motivate
them through hardships. Nevertheless, such teaching may produce undesirable outcomes in
situations where hard work is not the key.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, nevertheless, second, similarly, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29934210526 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76238828568 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585526315789 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3182789666 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.071428571 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64285714286 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249721266233 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921598286326 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454377579014 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717765935999 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548990830367 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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