Some educational systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15, while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each system? Which is better?
Some people argue that students should pay attention to particular fields at the age of 15, while others believe that they had better be taught a variety of subjects until graduating from school. This essay will discuss the advantages of each point of view and explain why I reckon the former opinion would be better.
On the one hand, children can benefit from studying all the subjects in many ways. Firstly, they will have wide knowledge in every aspect of life, which is derived from what they have learned at school . This assists them to make up their mind more wisely in any situation since they will be able to consider things from a multi-dimensional perspective. In addition, should students not have a clear orientation for their career in the future, learning a large number of courses will help them recognize their passion, which assists them with the most appropriate job selection.
On the other hand, in my opinion, acquiring knowledge from specific branches of study will bring students even more merits. First and foremost, instead of wasting time on unnecessary subjects, they will have more chances to focus on the fields of their own interest. Additionally, more time can be spent on extracurricular activities such as sports, volunteering, talents, etc. Both of them will provide them with not only hands-on experience but social skills as well. Last but not least, it goes without saying that students can fully understand their needs and develop deep insight into their current major. With such firm groundwork for future employment, they are more likely to be recruited for a well-paid job and be promoted to a higher position wherever they work.
In conclusion, each of these two educational systems has its own strengths and influences children in separate ways. But I do believe that in terms of achievements, skills and career potential, teaching students specific subjects should be more preferable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, well, while, i reckon, in addition, in conclusion, of course, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1167192429 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73271706795 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605678233438 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5477741582 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.857142857 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24793046596 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798746872163 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764996964757 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158888064291 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655475626327 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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