Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as
drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary curriculum. They
believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Looking from an educational perspective, educationalists have long been holding a belief in the interrelated association between students' academic achievements and artistic merits. Personally, I totally concur with this viewpoint and affirm that the inclusion of arts-based subjects in the mainstream curriculum will bring numerous benefits to learners.
For a variety of reasons, the notion of introducing arts, such as music and drama, as core subjects in secondary education is not a novel proposal. While students can greatly benefit from science courses by training themselves to be better at dealing with numerical data, art-based courses are expected to bring a balance to the functions of brain hemispheres. Thanks to such an interdisciplinary training programme, students can fully unleash their potentials. Another reason to support this new role of arts in the national curriculum is related to the mental effects it might have on children. Unlike science in which learners are required to have a high level of concentration, classes delivering these forms of art generally
have quite a more relaxing atmosphere. As a result, this will cause a shift in their attitude towards learning, from negative to positive. Having said that, without the official implementation of the Ministry of Education, some educational institutions might perceive the art field as redundant and leave it out of their scheme.
The advocate of arts in compulsory discipline does not stem from the personal
preference of artists but from its practical implications for improving students’ academic merits. Learning and practising how to transform invisible strings of thoughts into tangible artworks help sharpen children’s logical thinking and problem-solving skills. These will be of importance to learning progress as students will be able to logically classify their knowledge and filter out unnecessary information. Better still, art can become a vehicle for relaxation after tense hours of academic training. Enjoyable lessons with a focus craftsmanship will be effective in helping students recharge their battery before getting to scientific terminologies.
Taking everything into consideration, the significance of arts-based programmes has manifested itself in the positive influences arts might have on pupils performance. Th that the ignorance of arts in the curriculum will be a huge loss for education.
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Suggestion: to progress
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Suggestion: pupils'; pupil's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, second, so, still, while, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72777777778 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2397797517 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616666666667 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9067659786 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.875 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218430781083 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702182658859 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384929897026 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11203468061 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464353203747 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.25 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.78 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 78.4519038076 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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