To some extend people believe that advertising is morally irrelevant, do you agree or disagree
It is , however, widely argued, that the marketing strategies adopted by companies would rather be morally irrelevant, as though, it is just misleading people to spend their money regardless to their actually demand. Hereby, I would rather try to disclose the negative and unscrupulous manner of advertising from my own perception.
To begin with, TV commercial channels are significantly spreading, most of their programmes are dedicated to feature a product, in another word, foods and drinks companies spend a sum of money to a placement that shows the best possible deal of some sugary drinks, such as Pepsi. This a persuasive tool that attracts people attention rather than the product which might have effects on their well-being.
Another unscrupulous manner of advertising, most of the business sectors adopting marketing strategies, that focus on a certain age group, children are affected the most for instance, a company that showing up a candy product relatively as big as a man, the kids assuming it’s a real and would go for it, which sometimes cause to affect their relationship with parent.
A bit further, tobacco companies have invested a great deal of money on adverts, smart box packaging, and flavouring cigarettes and other that is causing mislead to the customers, unfortunately, records level of the smokers have significantly risen to unprecedented figures.
To recapitulate, having looked at the above points, despite benefits that people might have out of the competitiveness of the business sectors, advertisements or marketing strategies have impeached societies the most. Therefore, i would rather suggest that a tremendous scrutiny and regulation has to be applied.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4641509434 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1209257459 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618867924528 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.7371719584 49.4020404114 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.0 106.682146367 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.125 20.7667163134 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.625 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.075520519581 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0343968067379 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334506270495 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0410221535697 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395674213009 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.9 13.0946893788 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.98 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.1 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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