Some people become famous at young age. Is it good or bad?
In recent years, it has become far normal to see famous people who gained fame very soon. In my view, this trend could have positive and negative consequences in equal measure.
Rising to fame at adolescence can be seen positive for both famous people and the society. On an individual level, achieving fame usually equals becoming prosperous, resulting in providing a high quality of life. It means that the famous young are more likely to be financially secure in the future in comparison to their peers. In addition, thanks to their immense popularity, they are able to make countless communication with powerful individuals, again resulting in a brilliant and guaranteed future. From the societal perspective, these accomplished youth can be a good role model for the youngsters as many of them are determined and motivated. As an obvious example, Messi is the most renowned soccer player becoming famous at age 17 for his astonishing talent and admittedly his effort. Having been his fun, a large number of teenagers are encouraged to pursue their passions and hope to achieve their goals.
However, the personal and societal arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle. Firstly, a majority of young well-known people have no privacy in their private life. They are usually followed by paparazzi or shown in tabloids. Consequently, they may find it difficult to make a lovely relationship and then start a family. Secondly, it may be that due to the attractive vision of the renowned young's lives, a large number of youngsters leave their education and seek for fame and fortune. As a consequence the community face with the shortage of educated experts. This is a serious issue emerged in a number of European countries. In fact, having found that becoming famous is the easiest way to be prosperous, most of adolescents in these countries want to be a singer or actor rather than a doctor or engineer.
In conclusion, winning fame at lower age will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on famous individuals and on the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the adolescents') or simply say ''most adolescents''.
Suggestion: most of the adolescents; most adolescents
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04678362573 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86019918411 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573099415205 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9493814229 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8888888889 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22018361702 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594374513362 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650845630039 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13736055204 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394913024068 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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